Author's Note:Here is a journal entry on a day at the beach. I haven't done a journal entry in awhile, so I'm going to try to refresh my memory by writing this one. I've been hoping that all this snow will melt and that it will get warmer, so these thoughts remind of going to the beach. I hope you enjoy my journal entry, please comment on it!
A soft breeze blows through your hair. The sun is bright against the pure blue sky; there are no clouds on this beautiful summer day. The sand under your feet feels like hot coals that were baked under the sun, but you welcome it. It takes your mind off of the long, cold days of winter. You feel like your feet are on fire and you run towards the water which will calm the burning on your feet. You jump in the ice cold water soothes the burning sensation and you relax, turn on your back looking at the sky, you float on top of the clear water, above the colorful fish and coral.
A soft breeze blows through your hair. The sun is bright against the pure blue sky; there are no clouds on this beautiful summer day. The sand under your feet feels like hot coals that were baked under the sun, but you welcome it. It takes your mind off of the long, cold days of winter. You feel like your feet are on fire and you run towards the water which will calm the burning on your feet. You jump in the ice cold water soothes the burning sensation and you relax, turn on your back looking at the sky, you float on top of the clear water, above the colorful fish and coral.
This piece was really good. You used a lot fo voice and I pictured myself being on the beach. Great job.
ReplyDeleteThis was really nice to think about especially in these in these months like March which can't decide whether to be winter or spring. I think you should expand this piece. Very relaxing and well written.
ReplyDeleteI totally agree with the comments above. It was a really relaxing piece. I definitely think you should expand this and maybe try to change it into a poem.
ReplyDeleteI also totally agree with the fact that it was very relaxing and nice to think about. I do think that you should expand, maybe make it into a poem like Katelyn said, or just make it into a story of someone at the beach.
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